Today, I'm offering a snippet from my work in progress, a cross-over paranormal romantic suspense with BDSM elements, entitled Second Chance Succubus. CSI Chayse Wolffe neither trusts nor likes succubae, and with a murder in her club, he's sure she's lying to him about the body.
“What makes you
assume I’m lying to you, CSI Wolffe?”
“Three things,
actually, Lady Aislynn.” He tried to keep the growl out of his voice, but his animosity
for her kind coupled with the lying stretched his patience thin. “First, he had fresh bruising all over his body that couldn’t
have come from one of the dancers with the whole 'no touch' rule. Second, his
genitals were severely mutilated by some sort of knife or weapon not usually
kept in a 'strip club'. And third, he’d been completely drained of blood from a
puncture of his left femoral artery, but there was no blood on his clothes or
the chair where he was found. That means he was moved.”
Chayse crossed
his arms over his chest. “So, do you want to change your statement, Lady Aislynn?”
Sorry, that was nine, but the pause was needed. And Aislynn does have some explaining to do. ;) There are several great authors on the Weekend Writing Warrior list and a few of my favorites are Sarah Ballance, Paula Martin, Goran Zidar, Karla Doyle, and Lila Shaw. Thank you all for stopping by and happy reading! :)
Well he is certainly hostile. I hope she puts him in his place, lol.
ReplyDeleteI can't say I'd trust a succubus either. I love the sarcasm in the last sentence. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteOoh this all sounds very exciting! I love a bit of intrigue!
ReplyDeleteInteresting angst going on here.
ReplyDeleteOh wow... love this snippet! Chayse has certainly got bite ;) love his attitude and deliberation.
ReplyDeleteFor her kind. Interesting.
ReplyDeleteRuh-roh, that doesn't sound good. I hope she thinks fast. I'm sitting on the edge of my seat wanting to know more. More Please.
ReplyDeleteSounds like a vampire did it! She's innocent!
ReplyDeleteI sense a major clash coming between these two! Great snippet!
ReplyDelete~Joyce Scarbrough
Seems like she has a lot of explaining todo - and fast!
ReplyDeleteOooh, can cut the tension and animosity with a knife!
ReplyDeleteLooks like a cut and dried case. :) Very nice
ReplyDeleteI like him. Wonderful snippet!
ReplyDeleteLooks like he's caught her out in a web of lies. I like his no-nonsence attitude to the crime and the way he lays the facts out to trip her up.
ReplyDeleteI like Wolffe's reaction to her. His dialogue shows his emotions without having to add more details. But I'm guessing she won't change her statement.
ReplyDeleteOohhh, nice tension between them. I'm wondering if she's now going to put him in his place.
ReplyDeletelove the premise and can see the character already
ReplyDeleteOh, my. Great tension and intrigue.
ReplyDeleteInteresting (if a bit gruesome LOL), can't wait to see what she has to say for herself. Terrific snippet!
ReplyDeleteGreat snippet, certainly lays his case out. I love the way he emphasizes "Lady" at the end. Just a thought, but it might have even more impact if he doesn't use the Lady initially, maybe just Aislyn, when he first addresses her, or, if he knows her last name, Ms. Just a thought.
ReplyDeleteGreat job!
Thanks, Virginia. Lady Aislynn is her title, but he doesn't think she's much of a lady. She's the Mistress of a BDSM club. :)
DeleteHard to argue with his reasoning.
ReplyDeleteHmmm. Great snippet! Loving this story.
ReplyDeleteHe's going to be rather upset if it turns out she's telling the truth. Lots of tension in this snippet.
ReplyDeleteHe does make a most convincing argument!
ReplyDeleteDoesn't look good for the Lady, now does it? Great eight!
ReplyDeleteOkay, I thought I commented but it's not here and I don't know if I did something wrong or what. =cP My comment was that he's got a point (and that he does!) LOL.
ReplyDeleteLOL... I'd be mad if I were him too. ;)
ReplyDeleteSounds like she's in trouble. Lots of questions. Great tension, too.
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