Welcome, Sixers, and Happy Mother's Day! I hope you are having a lovely time with your families, but if not, may I offer you a little entertainment? :) Thank you so much for stopping by for my Six Sentence Sunday snippet. I realize there are a lot of authors on the Six Sentence Sunday list, so I'm doubly grateful you've taken the time to stop by mine.
Today I'm introducing a romantic suspense WIP that has developed from #flashfiction. It's as yet untitled about Detective Cassie Tucker and PI Jack Pierce. These six came from the following photo. Cassie has been called down to a crime scene by her Captain and she's expecting to find a body. She gets something else instead.
“He didn’t call for you, I did.”
The new voice made her jerk around in surprised
recognition. The woolen lump amongst the long grasses and reeds she’d taken for
wet debris morphed into Jack Pierce, the man who’d broken her heart long before
she’d become a cop. He looked bedraggled, his faded gray eyes tired and
supporting bags of fatigue. A scabbed gash parted his short, drenched hair
while an EMT fussed over him, trying to secure a bandage around his head.
“How did you find me, Jack?”
Uh-oh, she doesn't seem so happy to see him. There are several favorite authors of mine on the list and a few of them are Zee Monodee, Goran Zidar, Cara Bristol, Dianne Hartsock, and Gem Sivad. Thanks so much for stopping by and happy reading! :)
Great six!
ReplyDeleteExcellent description of him!
ReplyDeleteOh, I like this set up. He needs her, she's a cop and he once broke her heart. Lots of ingredients for a great plot here.
ReplyDeleteOh, I love old heartbreak revisited stories! Can't wait to see just what he needs her for. :)
ReplyDeleteLove this line: "The woolen lump amongst the long grasses and reeds she’d taken for wet debris morphed into Jack Pierce.." I could see it.
ReplyDeleteIntriguing six! I think it says a lot about their former relationship that those are the first words out of her mouth upon seeing him injured.
If he'd been there long enough for the gash to scab over, he did probably look like debris.
ReplyDeleteSome serious history must be between them for them to have a past, her to see him scuffed off and simply demand how he found her, rather than inquiring after his well-being. Ouch. I remember this prompt! It's cool that it grew from being flash fiction to something more.
ReplyDeleteVery dark scene, but compelling. Good work!
ReplyDeleteOh, Siobhan! This has wonderful potential. I can't wait to follow Jack and Cassie. I love the imagery in this scene, and the photo it came from. Well done!
ReplyDeleteI love her first look at him, and her misplaced concern. :)
ReplyDeleteFlash fiction can be a great source for inspiration, but when that flash fiction piece just demands more attention it can also be distracting when it stalls another piece. I am in the middle of that situation myself right now.
ReplyDeleteI like the set up here, you've developed a history and created a mood all in this brief passage. Good luck with wherever it takes you. :-)
Fantastic description here! I'm hooked in six. ;c) And I'm sorry I'm so late responding. I got behind last week and am still catching up. ;c)
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