Thursday, May 24, 2012

A Moth's Date #100words for the #FridayFictioneers

Another glorious Friday and another 100 words for the FridayFictioneers hosted by Madison Woods. My snippet is a little longer than 100 words, but every time I cut something out of it, the feeling of the story changed. This little tale was inspired by Madison's photo.

Jasper disappeared over the ledge ahead of her just as Jade’s strength gave out.
“I can’t do it, Jasper.”
“Come on, Jade. You’re almost there. Just a little further.”
She huffed in disgust. “Just what is so great about this place, anyway?”
“The food is to die for.”
“And why can’t we use our wings to get there?”
“Did you want a predator to see you?” She could hear the shudder in his voice. “We have to remain under the radar. Come on!”
Jade dragged herself over the lip of the ledge and lay there panting for a few moments. The hiss of metal against metal made her antennae flutter and the most delightful smell wafted over her.
“Mothra’s Wings! What is that wonderful smell?”
Jasper laughed. “See? I told you it’d be worth it.”

Thanks so much for stopping by. Happy weekend and happy reading! :)

19 comments:

  1. nice li'l story....here's one of ours: http://writersclubkl.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/friday-fictioneer-happy-meal/

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  2. Never seen so many conversational moths. Nice one!

    http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/05/24/checkin-out-the-joint-friday-fictioneers-may-2012/

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  3. "The food is to die for." Indeed.

    Here's mine: http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/

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  4. Ahaha. Mothra's wings! Apparently the grease appeals to moths as well.

    My attempt: http://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/05/24/chasing-the-divine/

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  5. Nice story with easy flowing dialogue. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/fridayfictioneers-preying-mantis/

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  6. Anthropomorphism rocks - nice dialogue and I love the idea that a moth could be out of shape too, really well placed alongside a McDonalds :-)

    Here's mine too: http://womanontheedgeofreality.com/2012/05/25/fairys-through-the-window/

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  7. Nice story.

    Here's mine: http://logo-ligi.com/2012/05/25/mothballs/

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  8. Fun! McDonald's would love that moths are their best fans. :-)

    Thanks for stopping by mine.

    http://erinleary.wordpress.com/2012/05/24/flight-path/

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  9. Great dialogue, and I'm so glad things go well for this little pair. I hope they get a romantic bite to eat before someone shoos them away!

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  10. Fun and imaginative story, Siobhan. Thanks for the nice comments on my story.

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  11. Siobhan, your story was pure shenanigans, I love it. Like two teenagers sneaking out to do something they aren't supposed to. Great feel to this, like they'd do anything for a good meal. I've been there, not for fast food but I know the feeling. Here is my share: http://remakingme-atiyatownes.blogspot.com/2012/05/friday-flash-fiction-best-hubby-ever.html

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  12. HI: Enjoyed this delightful story. It is somewhat similar to mine. Here is it:
    www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com

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  13. You can't go wrong with a Mothra reference! HAHA! Very fun piece.


    Kathy
    http://notforallmarkets.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/beauty-in-truth/

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  14. Delightfully humorous little romp through the dating life of moths. Absolutely priceless!

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  15. If I were a moth, I think "Mothra's wings" would be my oath of choice as well. Thanks for posting this! Mine's here: http://stonesoupnovelist.com/2012/05/24/a-scene-from-the-novel-the-alchemists-tower/

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  16. LOL, that was a cute story. I loved the "Mothra's wing" swear, too.

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  17. I loved the antennae flutter and especially "Mothra's wings!" Very clever!

    --Jan
    http://janmorrill.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/flashfriday-fictioneers-last-supper/

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  18. Bravo for Mothra! Delightful take on the prompt and charming use of dialogue.
    Yours, as ever,
    Lindaura
    If you haven't stopped by, here I am:
    http://fictionvictimtoo.blogspot.com

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