Jasper disappeared over the ledge
ahead of her just as Jade’s strength gave out.
“I can’t do it, Jasper.”
“Come on, Jade. You’re almost
there. Just a little further.”
She huffed in disgust. “Just what
is so great about this place, anyway?”
“The food is to die for.”
“And why can’t we use our wings to
get there?”
“Did you want a predator to see
you?” She could hear the shudder in his voice. “We have to remain under the
radar. Come on!”
Jade dragged herself over the lip
of the ledge and lay there panting for a few moments. The hiss of metal against
metal made her antennae flutter and the most delightful smell wafted over her.
“Mothra’s Wings! What is that
wonderful smell?”
Jasper laughed. “See? I told you
it’d be worth it.”
Thanks so much for stopping by. Happy weekend and happy reading! :)
nice li'l story....here's one of ours: http://writersclubkl.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/friday-fictioneer-happy-meal/
ReplyDeleteNever seen so many conversational moths. Nice one!
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"The food is to die for." Indeed.
ReplyDeleteHere's mine: http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/
Ahaha. Mothra's wings! Apparently the grease appeals to moths as well.
ReplyDeleteMy attempt: http://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/05/24/chasing-the-divine/
Nice story with easy flowing dialogue. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/fridayfictioneers-preying-mantis/
ReplyDeleteAnthropomorphism rocks - nice dialogue and I love the idea that a moth could be out of shape too, really well placed alongside a McDonalds :-)
ReplyDeleteHere's mine too: http://womanontheedgeofreality.com/2012/05/25/fairys-through-the-window/
Nice story.
ReplyDeleteHere's mine: http://logo-ligi.com/2012/05/25/mothballs/
Fun! McDonald's would love that moths are their best fans. :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks for stopping by mine.
http://erinleary.wordpress.com/2012/05/24/flight-path/
Great dialogue, and I'm so glad things go well for this little pair. I hope they get a romantic bite to eat before someone shoos them away!
ReplyDeleteFun and imaginative story, Siobhan. Thanks for the nice comments on my story.
ReplyDeleteSiobhan, your story was pure shenanigans, I love it. Like two teenagers sneaking out to do something they aren't supposed to. Great feel to this, like they'd do anything for a good meal. I've been there, not for fast food but I know the feeling. Here is my share: http://remakingme-atiyatownes.blogspot.com/2012/05/friday-flash-fiction-best-hubby-ever.html
ReplyDeleteHI: Enjoyed this delightful story. It is somewhat similar to mine. Here is it:
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You can't go wrong with a Mothra reference! HAHA! Very fun piece.
ReplyDeleteKathy
http://notforallmarkets.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/beauty-in-truth/
Mothra's Wings! I love it! Excellent tale, well crafted. http://www.unfoldingmyth.com/fridayfictioneers/
ReplyDeleteDelightfully humorous little romp through the dating life of moths. Absolutely priceless!
ReplyDeleteIf I were a moth, I think "Mothra's wings" would be my oath of choice as well. Thanks for posting this! Mine's here: http://stonesoupnovelist.com/2012/05/24/a-scene-from-the-novel-the-alchemists-tower/
ReplyDeleteLOL, that was a cute story. I loved the "Mothra's wing" swear, too.
ReplyDeleteI loved the antennae flutter and especially "Mothra's wings!" Very clever!
ReplyDelete--Jan
http://janmorrill.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/flashfriday-fictioneers-last-supper/
Bravo for Mothra! Delightful take on the prompt and charming use of dialogue.
ReplyDeleteYours, as ever,
Lindaura
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