Thursday, March 1, 2012

Five Sentence Fiction - Enchanted

I've joined a group of fiction writers hosted by Lillie McFerrin called Five Sentence Fiction. The word this week is "enchanted". Here's my little bit of work.

“I order you to marry me and be my Queen!”

The moment the words thundered into the room, Jakran looked like he wanted to swallow them back in, but he raised his horned head and glared at her. Tricia's enchantment gave way to anger and she lifted her chin and faced him down. Who the hell did he think he was? The title of “King of the goblins” didn’t mean much more than "jailer" and she refused to be coerced into anything.

So there you have my attempt at #FiveSentenceFiction. I used the prompt in my WIP The Goblin King. Comments are much appreciated and stop by Lillie's Blog for more FSF offerings. :)


  1. Ahhh, nice!! I know this story, and I can well imagine Tricia's enchantment is fading quickly after such an edict. :) Welcome to #FiveSentenceFiction!

  2. Dear Siobhan,

    Queen of the Goblins doesn't have much of a ring to it, does it? Nice five sentences.



  3. I like her feisty thinking! She's going to win this game, I think :)

  4. Ordering a woman to do anything never ends well. Very nice.

  5. Jakran had one of those moments where your mouth gets ahead of your brain. I can certainly relate to that. After 37 years of marriage, I've learned to take a marketing approach when trying to sell ideas at home.

    Thanks for reading my Friday Flash. Here's the link for others who might be interested

    1. LOL Russell, truer words were never written. :D

  6. Very nice use of the word enchantment and awesome story. I haven't tried a fairy tale yet. This one sprung to life!

  7. "I order you to marry me," only works if the dude is at a restaurant and there is a meal called "You To Marry Me."

    This is a great 5 sentence story. I'd have laughed at him, though. :)

    My drabble is here:


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