Week Eight of #ThursThreads had some great tales! Thanks to all who entered this week. I'm honored to see all of you and read your stories. And it was great to have some new "faces" join us. Huge thank you to judge Zee Monodee for reading through all of them.
- Siobhan Muir | @SiobhanMuir
- Nancy Porter | @ModernBard1024
- Sheilagh Lee | @SweetSheil
- Toni Wyatt | @Toni1777
- Jeffrey Hollar | @Klingorengi
- Greg Nance | @acenance
- Wakefield Mahon | @WakefieldMahon
- Charles W Jones | @ChuckWesJ
- J. Whitworth Hazzard | @zombiemechanics
- Ryan Strohman | @rastrohman
- Cara Michaels | @caramichaels
- Margaret McNulty | @charitygirlblog
- Kimberly Gould | @Kimmydonn
- Lisa McCourt Hollar | @jezri1
- Richard C. Hale | @Richard_C_Hale
- Robert Mahone | @Computilizer
- Miranda Gammella | @MLGammella
- Nellie Batz | @solimond
- Tom Keller | @dryadsgarden
- Aurora Lee | @AuroraLee
- Erin Ashby | @spoonflipper
Cara Michaels | @caramichaels
Zee says: Struck with me mostly for the effective world-building and atmosphere. The excerpt delves right into the action, without any fluff or padding, and the reader is roped in and involved without realizing. Also received the mention for the effective use of dialogue, especially for as a characterization tool. And that last line is a definite hook: "We've got three weapons, two people, and a prayer. We can't lose".
Miranda Gammella | @MLGammella
Zee says: Especially loved the building of the pace, from slow and shallow to fast and deep within a short span of words. There's time and opportunity to get into the storyline, get acquainted with the characters, but at the same time, the impending doom is rising crescendo as the intrigue, danger, and especially the prompt, are neatly and skilfully woven in.
Aurora Lee | @AuroraLee
Zee says: The last line is intriguing; it takes the story in a different direction from the actual murder, so while it uses the prompt, it strays from the beaten path to immerse the reader into the heroine's POV and make the reader care about the heroine's future.
Wakefield Mahon | @WakefieldMahon
Zee says: Special mention for making effective use of the prompt away from the literal meaning. While others have used this angle in their snippets, here the prompt and information are quietly and easily woven in, and the fresh and vibrant characterization, through the dialogue, takes the excerpt to an entertaining level.
Week Eight Winner
Zee says: excerpt was interesting with a very good and unique paranormal twist. The short piece also conveyed the dark atmosphere and world succinctly, and the author managed to infuse humour, information reveal, and the plot without wasting time and/or words to place us in the gist of the storyline, not just the murder scene. The characterization of both Percy and her paranormal handler are also spot-on, creating a vivid picture already in the reader's mind.
The crowd whispered amongst themselves as Percy perched above them on the building, tapping one booted foot against the stone. She would have tried to get down there but there were too many people. She lost her chance and now she had to go lurk in the morgue.
Her nose wrinkled a bit. She hated going to the morgue.
“I don’t know why you dislike it so much. It isn’t like death should bother you.” The smooth voice intoned next to her as the suited man sat down, platinum blonde hair smoothed back from an impassive face. Ice blue eyes glanced down at the crowd. “You deal with the dead all the time.”
“I’m used to just going to the place where they live. There, it’s like a gathering. And the last time I went to a morgue, there were three of them and they kept arguing with each other until I threatened to send them on another path. You try dealing with a Jewish mother and an extreme Catholic. They expected to find their own personal nirvana.” Percy snorted, pushing hot pink bangs out of her face. “Anyway, down there, it’s going to be a while. No doubt, it’s a murder.”
“Hmm…no doubt. You still have a job to do and I want your reports sent in before the end of the week or I’ll have to speak to Management about it again.”
She stuck out her tongue as he faded away to air. “Yeah, yeah.”
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