Friday, October 21, 2011

The Artifact #100words for #FridayFictioneers

Good morning and welcome back to the Weird, the Wild, & the Wicked, where odd things appear to be normal and normal things are just plain odd. Today Madison Woods offered the following photo for the #100words and here's my little story. Enjoy!

Talia stared at the limestone marble on Sebastian’s desk with fascination. He’d told her he’d found an ancient artifact, but he hadn’t described it.

That was it? That innocuous little gray and white sphere?

Glancing around her to make certain no one saw, Talia reached out for the small marble with the tips of her fingers. Just one touch; that was all she wanted.

Bright light flashed and disorientation swallowed her, then spat her out into a busy archaic village full of warriors focused on one pale and disheveled man braced against an adobe wall.

She gasped in terror. “Sebastian!”

Thanks for stopping by and happy reading! :)

9 comments:

  1. Well done, I really like this line, "Bright light flashed and disorientation swallowed her, then spat her out into a busy archaic village..."

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  2. Hey! It was clean and perfect and made me smile!
    The old magic with a sting in the tail.

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  3. Oooh, a time travel artifact. Love it!

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  4. Oh my goodness. I loved following you into this story. For some reason the flash really got into my mind! Fantastic.

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  5. That's some rock! Love the idea.

    One question, though: was Sebastian supposed to be missing at the beginning? It seems to be implied at the ending, though there was no foreshadowing leading up to this.

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  6. You know, you should never touch another man's sphere... ;)

    I loved the time travel and this description. "...Bright light flashed and disorientation swallowed her, then spat her out.." It such a great line! Loved it!

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  7. Dear Siobahn,

    Seems to me that village is going to keep having visitors. And why didn't Sebastian disappear the first time he touched it? Minor points in an otherwise delightful story. (I only thought of them long after I'd followed her into the village to find Sebastian, so, "Good job.")

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  8. I enjoyed it - right up my alley! So now I'm going to look at that marble differently every time I see it.

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  9. I found it very interesting that she had a premonition she shouldn't touch it. Robin

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