Sunday, August 25, 2013

#SnippetSunday - WIP - Dark and Stormy Night


Welcome to the Snippet Sunday on the Weird, the Wild, and the Wicked. Thank you so much for visiting. If you choose to comment today, I really appreciate it. Currently, the snippets are from a Work in Progress, the third story in the Cloudburst, Colorado series, and while they aren't consecutive, they are in order within the story. You can read the last snippet of The Beltane Witch HERE.

Today, I'm offering a snippet from the first chapter of The Cloudburst Coffee and Spa, a WIP in the Cloudburst Colorado series that deals with some of the darker kinks in love. Moira Callahan is only sixteen, but she's been having naughty thoughts about Aiden Westmorland, a distant family relative fostering with her family for the summer. Aiden is two years older and college bound, but they've connected on a deep level and have traded hot looks across the yard. This snippet is from the night he leaves and is probably NSFW. It's unedited, so please keep that in mind.

Moira returned to her bedroom and scooted over to the bedside table to switch off the light. As she passed her window, the lightning flashed again and she caught sight of something under the large Ponderosa pine in the yard. Wait, what was that? She paused and frowned into the slashing rainy dark.
Moira smelled the water as it pounded the window and the sharp ozone of burnt air from the lightning’s strike, but neither of those scents had her skin prickling or her nipples hardening again. She waited tensely for another flash, her breath sawing in and out of her chest in nervous excitement.
She thought her heart would explode and realized she held her breath, but she just couldn’t let it go. When the lightning finally granted her sight once more, she sighed explosively and gripped the windowsill until her hands cramped.
Aiden stood out there, under the Ponderosa, with his long, dark hair slicked from rain and sticking to his face and neck in wet tendrils. His wiry body flashed pale in the white of light, each muscle standing out in stark relief as he allowed the rain to bathe him. He had his head thrown back and one hand on his balls while his other hand stroked his dick in tight agony.

So much for getting away from her naughty thoughts of him. If you'd like to see a photo of the inspiration for Aiden, click HERE. :) There are several great authors on the Weekend Writing Warrior list and in the Snippet Sunday Facebook group. A few of my favorites are Anastasia Vitsky, SJ Maylee, Goran Zidar, Zee Monodee, and A.S. Fenichel.

Thanks so much for stopping by and happy reading. :)

17 comments:

  1. Wow, yeah, that would do it for me, too, even without the photo! :D

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  2. Her tension during the storm came through immediately. The final line (especially combined with the pic) was scorching. :)

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  3. Ooooh, my. I was totally sucked in and did NOT see that last line coming. What a deliciously wicked ending!

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  4. ohhh, looks like he's been caught peeping. ;) Very vivid descriptions. I could see the lightning strike and the sky light up. Terrific snippet.

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  5. There's so much here to love. You drew me right in and kept my attention. What a sight. :)

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  6. Wow. The detailed writing is fantastic.

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  7. Holy moly! That is quite an image! Whew!

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  8. Nice! I like how you combine the storm with tension building. I'm amazed at how well this is written, considering it hasn't been edited. I'm almost jealous. Great 8!

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  9. A hot scene it is. To be so hot and then see him under the rain, she must be going mad with lust. I would have liked you to show me his dick is erect or something.

    Good snippet.

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  10. Wow, a very hot scene despite all the rain! Terrific snippet!

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  11. Tantalizing! I love the tension of both the moment and the storm. Great snippet!

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  12. Oh my, my, my. Tantalizing is right. She is going to lose her mind poor girl. The storm and the emotions coincide perfectly ramping up the tension. Very well written scene!

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  13. He must really have decided to drive her insane!

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  14. Your descriptive writing is so dang good, Siobhan! And it never feels like you have to try hard to do it, never forced. Nice snippet!

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  15. I love the use of the senses, especially smelling the water. Excellent snippet -- I hope we get the next scene next week!

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  16. Goodness gracious! That was excellent! I That poor girl... I have the feeling she isn't going to get much sleep...

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