Sunday, November 6, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday - The Goblin King - Not So Smooth


Welcome back, Sixers! Thank you for returning for the snippets of my WIP The Goblin King. I really appreciate your comments and enjoy sharing the story with you. I hope you'll stop by the other blogs of authors who participate in Six Sentence Sunday. Three folks to definitely check out: Cara Michaels, Sterling Priest, and Tom Keller.

In this snippet, Tricia just tried to pull away and excited Jakran's inner predator. 

          Tricia whimpered so softly he barely heard it over the thunder of his own heart, but it pierced his lust like a lance through a water skin and he slammed back into the present moment. Disgust and chagrin ripped through him when he saw her hunched pose.
            Oh gods, I’m frightening her!
            Releasing her hands, Jakran lurched backwards in an awkward movement and landed hard on one hip. He grunted with pain, but kept moving until he stood beside an upset chair, using the ornate back to hold him steady. The chair shifted under his hands and he yelped, then set it upright, hoping he wouldn’t make any more embarrassing sounds that morning.

So much for being suave and debonair. ;) Thank you for coming by and happy reading! :)

28 comments:

  1. Jakran needs a mantra: "Pretty half-demons are friends, NOT food." LOL. Great 6 and I love Jakran's graceful backpedaling. :D

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  2. Poor guy !! LOL Love a guy who's anything but graceful.
    Nice 6

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  3. Well, he's making an impression! Nice 6!

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  4. Hey Siobhan! Love the six! It's great reading you, my friend! Hope you have a fantastic Sunday!

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  5. He may not be suave and debonair, but I like how concerned he is for her feelings. :)

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  6. Sensitive and clumsy...a fascinating combination!

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  7. Love a hero with flaws. Great descriptions.

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  8. Now see, that humanizes him and makes me like him. A lot. Fun six!

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  9. well, it's nice to know he's making an impression - at least showing that he's errr...goblin like the rest of us? LOL. Great six this week. Can't wait to see what you have next week

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  10. "it pierced his lust like a lance through a water skin" Love that line.

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  11. Ooooh. I love his reaction when he realizes he's scaring her. Never known goblins to care that much about others feelings before. Very nice six!

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  12. His flaws make him more realistic - and lovable. Love this story!

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  13. Love how real his reactions and feelings are. Well done!

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  14. Love how flustered he becomes when he sees her reaction.

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  15. His clumsiness when he thinks he's frightened her is adorable.

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  16. Even the most powerful males stumble when they fall. Great wride, darlin'

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  17. Great work. I like how your handling your hero. Excellent six!

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  18. I love this! A great six, really well written and sucked me right into the story. Thanks for sharing.

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  19. I loved the vulnerability. A hero with flaws is the best kind. Even the ones that stumble. :)

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  20. I love a man who isn't perfect. Looking forward to reading more! ;-)

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  21. I can so picture this scene. Nice 6!

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  22. Always had a soft spot for the klutzy ones. Nice six!

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  23. OMG! I loved the description - it was just so vivid! Great job, and a wonderful, strong six that totally puts us into the scene and into his shoes. :)

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  24. Great six, I totally loved his reaction :) And your descriptions ROCK!

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  25. Way to lose your cool points there, dude. LOL

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  26. Intriguing situation, of course we need to know why he's holding her and what next. Suspenseful six!

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  27. Oh I really liked this and I thought his yelp was endearing. It makes him more real that he's not suave and cool.
    Nice six!

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